I liked it. Even the disaffected voice is akin to say Harvey Pekar or a Robert Crumb kind of thing. It reminded me of some of the animation work done in the documentary Comic Book Confidential by Ron Mann.
Some fun stuff there but the credits and extra shots just pad and stretch it out. Editing needs to be used as your best friend. Be concise and don't extend things to meet a "length of time". This could be 30 seconds long and would play a lot funnier due to the speed. But for a first collaboration it's a good start
thanks for your feedback UniDublin we will keep that in mind :)
I guess you were bored...
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